30 March 2016.
Easter.
Yipee, it’s chocolate eggs time!’’ I shouted.
At Easter weekend.
My family and I.
At home.
Had a Easter hunt.
In the morning, we started the hunt found all eggs.
They were as brown as dirt.
Later my sister and I had more eggs-Mum and Dad surprised us.
They were as brown as dirt.
I went to bed and to go to.
sleep.I felt sick.
Okay, your outline is pretty good, Hollie, but now that it's written up this way it's easy to spot that you have used the same simile twice. So, we will have to figure out a new simile before you do the published version.
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